Comments for Something Fantastic Goes Here! http://borrissey.wordpress.com A Weblog for JOMC 711 Sat, 12 Dec 2009 15:09:28 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on End-of-Semester Blog: Final Revisions by NagsTashadops http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/12/10/end-of-semester-blog-final-revisions/#comment-672 NagsTashadops Sat, 12 Dec 2009 15:09:28 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/12/10/end-of-semester-blog-final-revisions/#comment-672 OMG enjoyed reading your post. I added your rss to my reader! OMG enjoyed reading your post. I added your rss to my reader!

]]> Comment on Module Week 11 Assignment: The Blog by becca http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/11/05/module-week-10-assignment-the-blog/#comment-670 becca Mon, 11 Aug 2008 17:56:01 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/11/05/module-week-10-assignment-the-blog/#comment-670 how utterly bizarre. i was looking for pictures from the Shakori festival and your blog popped up! how utterly bizarre. i was looking for pictures from the Shakori festival and your blog popped up!

]]> Comment on Module Week 14 Assignment: FAQ by brian carroll http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/12/03/module-week-14-assignment-faq/#comment-35 brian carroll Sat, 09 Dec 2006 18:31:22 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/12/03/module-week-14-assignment-faq/#comment-35 good work here, boris. i like the hierarchy you establish. i like how accessible you make the publication using these faqs, with lots of touch points and contact channels. a few suggestions: all caps are problematic, for reasons the study book describes. i don't recommend them, and they tower over the smaller text, diminishing the more important, specific questions. for the first question: i recommend "What is Pitchfork.com?" because it is an "it" and not a "who" "daily, Web-based" > delete "out"; you are "precise" to one decimal point, not specific. "I am a published journalist. How do I write for Pitchfork?" >> suggest going with only "How do I write..." In answer, "If you are a published journalist, X; if you are not published, Y." this will consolidate the two answers. most will not be published journos, presumably, so this more quickly gets to the answer a majority will need. is the term "album" still used? with all the MP3s and such? that's kind of cool. good work here, boris.

i like the hierarchy you establish.

i like how accessible you make the publication using these faqs, with lots of touch points and contact channels.

a few suggestions:
all caps are problematic, for reasons the study book describes. i don’t recommend them, and they tower over the smaller text, diminishing the more important, specific questions.

for the first question: i recommend “What is Pitchfork.com?” because it is an “it” and not a “who”

“daily, Web-based” > delete “out”; you are “precise” to one decimal point, not specific.

“I am a published journalist. How do I write for Pitchfork?” >> suggest going with only “How do I write…” In answer, “If you are a published journalist, X; if you are not published, Y.” this will consolidate the two answers. most will not be published journos, presumably, so this more quickly gets to the answer a majority will need.

is the term “album” still used? with all the MP3s and such? that’s kind of cool.

]]> Comment on Week Eight Assignment: Semiotic Analysis by tarheelblue http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/15/module-week-eight-assignment-semiotic-analysis/#comment-17 tarheelblue Thu, 19 Oct 2006 19:44:34 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/15/module-week-eight-assignment-semiotic-analysis/#comment-17 good post here on semiotics. like very much the link to mystery meat navigation. good post here on semiotics. like very much the link to mystery meat navigation.

]]> Comment on Week Eight Assignment: Pitchfork Content by tarheelblue http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/15/week-eight-assignment-pitchfork-content/#comment-16 tarheelblue Thu, 19 Oct 2006 17:00:38 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/15/week-eight-assignment-pitchfork-content/#comment-16 a good plan. 600 words is REALLY brief. I recommend a longer template for your reviews (unless 600 is typical for pitchfork reviews, in which case i guess your bound). i also suggest more than one, not all for the first week, but in presenting a series of reviews, you give readers (and pitchfork editors) a better look at your sensibilities, your writing, your emphases and criteria. full speed ahead a good plan. 600 words is REALLY brief. I recommend a longer template for your reviews (unless 600 is typical for pitchfork reviews, in which case i guess your bound). i also suggest more than one, not all for the first week, but in presenting a series of reviews, you give readers (and pitchfork editors) a better look at your sensibilities, your writing, your emphases and criteria. full speed ahead

]]> Comment on Module Week Six: Point of View by tarheelblue http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/08/module-week-six-point-of-view/#comment-15 tarheelblue Mon, 16 Oct 2006 17:21:33 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/08/module-week-six-point-of-view/#comment-15 an interesting audience to write for, and in so many ways. i like how you've honed right in on the challenge: being informative at a very high level, expert level, but not being snarky, elitist. yes, a demanding audience, so the bar is high. clarity is a noble goal. i can see a post-it on your laptop: "Can I write it more clearly?" what's the competition? where else can Music “snobs”, * Record buyers, * College radio stations and * Label music executives go to get the information you are providing? what is a "tastemaker"? pacesetters i get. taste arbiters i understand. making tastes? that i don't get. explain this to me, please. an interesting audience to write for, and in so many ways. i like how you’ve honed right in on the challenge: being informative at a very high level, expert level, but not being snarky, elitist. yes, a demanding audience, so the bar is high.

clarity is a noble goal. i can see a post-it on your laptop: “Can I write it more clearly?”

what’s the competition? where else can Music “snobs”, * Record buyers, * College radio stations and * Label music executives go to get the information you are providing?

what is a “tastemaker”? pacesetters i get. taste arbiters i understand. making tastes? that i don’t get. explain this to me, please.

]]> Comment on Module Week Six: Rewriting Poor Headlines by bc http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-rewriting-poor-headlines/#comment-14 bc Thu, 05 Oct 2006 20:10:19 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-rewriting-poor-headlines/#comment-14 very nicely done. you have a knack for news headlines. all three of yours would work just fine (sans the periods), are publishable, and vast improvements over those they fix. "Assume the positon" doesn't even relate. you're right, it's not clever. it's not even cute. very nicely done. you have a knack for news headlines. all three of yours would work just fine (sans the periods), are publishable, and vast improvements over those they fix.

“Assume the positon” doesn’t even relate. you’re right, it’s not clever. it’s not even cute.

]]> Comment on Module Week Six Assignment: Lists by bc http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-assignment-lists/#comment-13 bc Thu, 05 Oct 2006 20:08:09 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-assignment-lists/#comment-13 good. you wonder why they didn't present it the way you have -- all of the bands at a glance. so much easier to read, to make choices. good. good. you wonder why they didn’t present it the way you have — all of the bands at a glance. so much easier to read, to make choices. good.

]]> Comment on Module Week Six Assignment: New Headline by bc http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/13/#comment-12 bc Thu, 05 Oct 2006 20:07:12 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/13/#comment-12 yes, i like it much better. more inviting, playful. good. yes, i like it much better. more inviting, playful. good.

]]> Comment on Module Week Six: Same Article, New Headline by bc http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-same-article-new-headline/#comment-11 bc Thu, 05 Oct 2006 20:06:18 +0000 http://borrissey.wordpress.com/2006/10/01/module-week-six-same-article-new-headline/#comment-11 nice work here, boris, especially the first and third. one niggle: no need to put periods in headlines. they aren't punctuated except when they are questions or quotations. nice work here, boris, especially the first and third.

one niggle: no need to put periods in headlines. they aren’t punctuated except when they are questions or quotations.

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